09-20-2021, 11:39 PM
Thanks, Tiger, TqB, Knot, Isaw.
TqB - 'dreaming' is an improvement. Have made the change. Thanks. Also changed the 'fringing' line to what it was originally.
Tiger - 'with' is a good substitution. Have made the change.
Knot - 'the' is better than 'its', but just gone with the latter to avoid the repetition. I actually wasn't sure about 'smell'. I didn't like it, but 'scent' doesn't sound as nice, sonically. So I've left it in as it is.
Isaw - thanks for reading and commenting.
TqB - 'dreaming' is an improvement. Have made the change. Thanks. Also changed the 'fringing' line to what it was originally.
Tiger - 'with' is a good substitution. Have made the change.
Knot - 'the' is better than 'its', but just gone with the latter to avoid the repetition. I actually wasn't sure about 'smell'. I didn't like it, but 'scent' doesn't sound as nice, sonically. So I've left it in as it is.
Isaw - thanks for reading and commenting.