Under the dreaming eyes (Edit 1.0)

[Tiger the Lion]

Under the dreamy eyes 

Under the dreamy eyes could this line be struck in favor of letting the title lead into L2? (might be more a stylistic choice than an improvement)
of my love, I slept 
away the days and months, tomorrows
that went in a whisper. perhaps "with" for "in" - not sure, but you might be asking whisper to demarcate time passage?
Her familiar smell
and hair fringing a fairy circle 
on my face -
these and more, I miss today some combination of "here" or "now" might feel more immediate than today
on the purple hill, its sad sun’s rays 
dying into darkness. Wherever you are,
my love, I pray it is light. this last bit is really good and deserves its purple.

Quite enjoyed this, Busker. And I agree we need more Love Poems. When I first came to the Pen I was cautioned that there was little room left for originality in love poetry. I disagree. It just takes a little more courting.