Smitten

[Tiger the Lion]

I feel complelled to disagree.  Simple maybe, but bland?

Perhaps it's my empathy for love poems and blasphemy, but I haven't read anything like it before.  That makes it worth more than one read for me.

Strike me dead if I'm wrong.

Appreciate that, TB. I was agreeing with Busker that the hyperbole was a little forced and also that, even if bland wasn't the exact right word, in the end the poem wasn't quite meaty enough. So I didn't really disagree with anything Busker offered and wanted to acknowledge that. Also, I was trying to convey a sort of idolatry more than blasphemy. The theme of idolatry and the interplay between "smitten" and "strike me dead" somehow became more important to me than the poem as a whole, so I'm not surprised a discerning reader would find it lacking. Positive and negative observations are both useful. This is why we practice.