08-28-2021, 08:38 AM
(08-28-2021, 07:27 AM)Tiger the Lion Wrote: No. You're not hallucinating. I struck the last strike and changed you and I to you and me. I thought the end rhyme tied it up nicely. Maybe not.I missed that change to "me". I take it all back. I'd been on the road a lot yesterday. Not being careful in my reading.
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On third thought, I still miss the last "Strike me dead". Your new ending is better, but I liked the way the repetition worked of a final "Strike me dead".