Playmob - edit2

[micah3801]

Playmob


Looking at some plastic people
made for children, slick and bright;
there is but one format for them
in two sizes, kid and adult < i might prefer child here? something about kid is a little informal compared to the rest of the piece 
bending only at the waist.

Individuals bear clothing
printed on their molded selves–
click-hard beards and hairdos make
each one a character apart–
shiny model work of art.

Heads and hands come in two colors,
pink and brown with dotted eyes:
both smile, attitudes unaltered
by their faces’ shade assignment
at sententious factories.

overall, i find this piece super satisfying to read. good work! there are a couple places where i think the super specific wording could be better for flow, but i really enjoyed reading it. 

original version;

Looking at some plastic people
made for children, slick and bright;
there is but one format for them
in two sizes, kid and adult
bending only at the waist.

Each is different, with clothing
painted on its plastic self.
Click-hard beards and hairdos make each
character a thing apart–
molded, shiny work of art.

Heads and hands come in two colors,
pink and brown with dotted eyes:
both smile, characters unaltered
by their faces’ shades assigned
at far, sententious factories.