08-02-2021, 05:18 AM
edit;
Looking at some plastic people
made for children, slick and bright;
there is but one format for them
in two sizes, kid and adult
bending only at the waist.
Individuals bear clothing
printed on their molded selves–
click-hard beards and hairdos make
each one a character apart–
shiny model work of art.
Heads and hands come in two colors,
pink and brown with dotted eyes:
both smile, attitudes unaltered
by their faces’ shade assignment
at sententious factories.
Thanks to both critics. I think this addresses most of the issues raised, though not exactly following the suggestions.
Looking at some plastic people
made for children, slick and bright;
there is but one format for them
in two sizes, kid and adult
bending only at the waist.
Individuals bear clothing
printed on their molded selves–
click-hard beards and hairdos make
each one a character apart–
shiny model work of art.
Heads and hands come in two colors,
pink and brown with dotted eyes:
both smile, attitudes unaltered
by their faces’ shade assignment
at sententious factories.
Thanks to both critics. I think this addresses most of the issues raised, though not exactly following the suggestions.
Non-practicing atheist

