Lemon Dodo
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I guessed it was a cut up from the schizo back and forth. I really like a lot of the word play, use of similar sounds to dodo lemon duc de limon. If only there was a rabbit hole. I think though that a cut up should try to not be a cut up, saying it's a cut up should be a surprise, youre not asking for crit but I think it needs a little less chaos for the length, or, a more direct path, if that makes sense...
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Lemon Dodo - by TranquillityBase - 07-30-2021, 09:16 PM
RE: Lemon Dodo - by CRNDLSM - 07-31-2021, 01:02 AM
RE: Lemon Dodo - by TranquillityBase - 07-31-2021, 06:46 AM



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