*please stand by*

[Knot]

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Hi Snarl,
not sure about the title, it sets up a distance that detracts from the immediacy of the piece.
And the punctuation! Full stops followed by lower case, or upper case. Upper case to begin a new line, or not. It's far to erratic.

Some cut and paste thoughts


(buzzing fluorescent lightbulb)

I can't speak anymore.
I open my mouth and -
jaws unhinged spill
cotton gauze, syrup
of saliva - I can't
spit.

(disembodied unearthly scream)
I wanted to.
(sobbing from another room.)
You wanted me to
explain and I, I
had the words, I
I promise, I promise.

(a telenovela slow-mo shot ...................this takes me out of the poem/away from the speaker
plate dropped on the kitchen floor
shattering)

I have a tongue
(buzzing fluorescent lightbulb)
like fists on plexiglass;
like layers of layers of paper paste
glue plastered in. My arterial tubes.
I have a voice like. Caulking.
Crammed in my-

(embodied unearthly scream)
(buzzing fluorescent lightbulb)

I have a -
I have -
I -

...
(buzzing fluorescent lightbulb)

I have so much to say about how much I cannot.

(lights out)



Best, Knot

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