The Plant of Joy

The Plant of Joy

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07-24-2021, 10:37 PM

Brian,

I really enjoyed this one. I'm still sorting it out, but I just wanted to give it a big thumbs up.

A couple of first impression notes: "poppy's phlegm" is too disgusting for me. You use the word "tarp" maybe too frequently (historically speaking).

TqB

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The Plant of Joy - by Brian Roberts - 07-24-2021, 08:02 AM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Knot - 07-24-2021, 07:48 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Brian Roberts - 07-24-2021, 10:00 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by TranquillityBase - 07-24-2021, 10:37 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Brian Roberts - 07-24-2021, 11:12 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Knot - 07-25-2021, 12:12 AM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Brian Roberts - 07-25-2021, 01:39 AM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Knot - 07-24-2021, 10:46 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Poetry In Motion - 07-29-2021, 11:32 AM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by Brian Roberts - 07-29-2021, 09:25 PM

RE: The Plant of Joy - by dukealien - 07-30-2021, 08:57 AM

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