Sonnet XIIV(to my seraphic wife, on our nuptials)

[busker]

This poem makes no sense. I genuinely couldn't tell if it was just bad writing, or deliberate trolling.
I shall assume the former.

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The only correction I can point out is that 'thou name' should be 'thy name' (that by itself should tell you that the poem is all over the place).
I can't offer any other constructive suggestion. If it's nonsense verse deliberately written as such, it doesn't produce the intended effect.

I knew my sonnet would be eviscerated.....ts thematic weavings are not too difficult to unravel, if one is patient. I understand your point, however, and it is a singular work, the most recondite I've ever penned. That being said, I really enjoy your work, busker. It is at once accessible and profound, which I envy.....thank you for the comments!

Thanks,  Brian
Although if you're after reading good poetry on this site, I would recommend digging up the poems of Ray, Milo, Todd, Just Mercedes, etc. They're a class apart.
Apologies if I was rude. We've had some guys deliberately trolling on the site before under various guises, so a bit wary.

I'll come back with more constructive feedback later.