Mood - Edit 2
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When that mood manifests
  each blazing view attests
to shocking beauty of
  Autumn alight.

Dead leaves brush painterly
  in drifts of color we
can't help but rhapsodize,
  drowning our sight.

Is it one’s mood that makes
  tree-chaff a scene that wakes
awe at its majesty,
  hymns of delight?

Or does that minstrel mood
  kindle as attitude
by chance of circumstance
  when the scene's right?




Thanks to all critics, including those who just liked it  >Big Grin< .  In this edit, I've specifically tackled the two areas @TranquilityBase noted (accurately) as weak.  I did hang on to "painterly," though.
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Mood - Edit 2 - by dukealien - 12-15-2017, 01:10 AM
RE: Mood - by flowerburgers - 12-15-2017, 03:11 AM
RE: Mood - by flagthrower - 12-15-2017, 07:43 AM
RE: Mood - by JmLA - 12-15-2017, 03:55 PM
RE: Mood - by Linda - 12-16-2017, 06:06 AM
RE: Mood - by Richard - 12-16-2017, 12:49 PM
RE: Mood - by Knot - 12-17-2017, 05:01 AM
RE: Mood - by nibbed - 12-18-2017, 01:18 AM
RE: Mood - by vagabond - 12-18-2017, 06:30 AM
RE: Mood - Edit, title change - by dukealien - 12-18-2017, 07:23 AM
RE: Mood - Edit, title change - by Erthona - 07-02-2021, 11:42 AM
RE: Mood - Edit, title change - by Brian Roberts - 07-14-2021, 11:51 PM
RE: Mood - Edit 2 - by dukealien - 07-17-2021, 06:53 AM
RE: Mood - Edit 2 - by Knot - 07-18-2021, 11:18 PM



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