Venus Speed Trap

[Knot]

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Hi TqB,

no problem with blunt

but don't see L5-7 like that, autobahn/grasses, asphalt?

always with wings, - this is redundant : bug plus windshield equal wings.

and you've similar repetitions to the original;L6-7 and 9-10 for instance

And the ending, inevitable death (with no prospect of consummation) versus ... what?

so ...

soul-stained and monkey-wrenched,

on an autobahn of imagined sex,

I am a windshield bug Reborn,

Dissolve me with chemicals,

wipe me away, no matter,

I will aim myself again

and forever at that point

of no return.

(Not seeing the 'complex' here. More a 'Venus drives a Mustang' vibe)

Best, Knot

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