07-03-2021, 06:48 AM
Thank you both for the feedback! I'm liking how this piece is developing so I can't thank everyone enough who's given their input so far.
Erthona,
I'm leaning more into the conditional nature of the poem in this draft so I hope it becomes more of a strength rather than a weakness. I'm also trying to go for the feeling that the poem is directly addressing the reader, which is why it's being written this way. If it's still not working, as always, please let me know! :-)
Best,
Alex
Erthona,
I'm leaning more into the conditional nature of the poem in this draft so I hope it becomes more of a strength rather than a weakness. I'm also trying to go for the feeling that the poem is directly addressing the reader, which is why it's being written this way. If it's still not working, as always, please let me know! :-)
Best,
Alex