07-03-2021, 04:43 AM
River- Thanks for the thoughtful critique. It got my wheels turning about how board this poem can be taken. The original idea was brought out when I was listening to a whole of the first records I bought when I got my turn table.
There is this particular record from Lavender Diamond "Imagine Our Love". After my first adult love moved to Portland we broke things off. I listened to this record and remember crying and thinking. Man I can't listen to this without thinking about this moment in time, a past love almost like a spirit. To this day I listen to this record and remember the whole event so vividly.
I wanted to capture that in a brief poem. I reworded, re titled, and rearranged this poem to hopefully get that idea across more fluidly, the first edit was way to broad. I hope you like the changes and get the idea I was going for!
Thanks again for the thoughtful reply
There is this particular record from Lavender Diamond "Imagine Our Love". After my first adult love moved to Portland we broke things off. I listened to this record and remember crying and thinking. Man I can't listen to this without thinking about this moment in time, a past love almost like a spirit. To this day I listen to this record and remember the whole event so vividly.
I wanted to capture that in a brief poem. I reworded, re titled, and rearranged this poem to hopefully get that idea across more fluidly, the first edit was way to broad. I hope you like the changes and get the idea I was going for!
Thanks again for the thoughtful reply
Only one thing is impossible for God: To find any sense in any copyright law on the planet.
--mark twain
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--mark twain
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