06-23-2021, 02:37 PM
(This post was last modified: 06-23-2021, 02:37 PM by RiverNotch.)
Thanks for the feedback!
@TB - Not sure if it really worked/works, but "seat of domes" is a sort of pun. Greek of seat is cathedra, so it refers to a domed church/cathedral.
Thanks for the readings, Mark and duke! I was thinking more of the former than the latter, but in this case it doesn't matter -- I am honestly delighted it could be read the way your read it, duke! but also a little disturbed, considering busker's read and my response to it. The Islamic undercurrent is intended -- that it's strong, too -- but that it might be associated with oil, and so the region whose wealth at the moment seems the most tied to it, thus making the poem less ambivalent than I mean it to be?
And much as I disagree with the second part of your reading, I still thank you for the critique, busker! On the first part of your reading, yeah, what I'm intending to do here (as well as what I intended to do with Dawn Psalm) is still very much an idk, and hopefully I produce some stronger responses to the psalms later.
@TB - Not sure if it really worked/works, but "seat of domes" is a sort of pun. Greek of seat is cathedra, so it refers to a domed church/cathedral.
Thanks for the readings, Mark and duke! I was thinking more of the former than the latter, but in this case it doesn't matter -- I am honestly delighted it could be read the way your read it, duke! but also a little disturbed, considering busker's read and my response to it. The Islamic undercurrent is intended -- that it's strong, too -- but that it might be associated with oil, and so the region whose wealth at the moment seems the most tied to it, thus making the poem less ambivalent than I mean it to be?
And much as I disagree with the second part of your reading, I still thank you for the critique, busker! On the first part of your reading, yeah, what I'm intending to do here (as well as what I intended to do with Dawn Psalm) is still very much an idk, and hopefully I produce some stronger responses to the psalms later.