06-22-2021, 09:12 PM
Hey Notch-
Since this MISC I'll only comment on the content and not make suggestions on the structure.
You start off with a variation of Jesus on the cross, when he is said to have called out “Eli, Eli, lema sabachthani ("My God, my God, why have you forsaken me" ). That's a predicament we will all find ourselves in, and I can appreciate how you may visualize your last moments.
I also appreciate the way you show that Jesus has been grossly mis-appropriated by the "seat of domes" and how mis-interpretations have " scraped away your face."
The final line (question), "were you gone so long?" implies that N feels misled by dogma/doctrine, and recognizes that "The Truth" remains a mystery.
Interestinfg piece, Notch, thanks for posting this one.
Mark
Since this MISC I'll only comment on the content and not make suggestions on the structure.
You start off with a variation of Jesus on the cross, when he is said to have called out “Eli, Eli, lema sabachthani ("My God, my God, why have you forsaken me" ). That's a predicament we will all find ourselves in, and I can appreciate how you may visualize your last moments.
I also appreciate the way you show that Jesus has been grossly mis-appropriated by the "seat of domes" and how mis-interpretations have " scraped away your face."
The final line (question), "were you gone so long?" implies that N feels misled by dogma/doctrine, and recognizes that "The Truth" remains a mystery.
Interestinfg piece, Notch, thanks for posting this one.
Mark