06-02-2021, 03:16 PM
(06-02-2021, 11:55 AM)rowens Wrote: I am my own Authority, and I denounce Authority.It's all going along great until "I'm alone..."
I'm scared, insecure, intimidated, longing, insulting,
I'm harsh and caustic, egotistical, narcissistic,
lecherous, savage, strange,
I'm vicious, uncouth, unkempt, solitary,
I'm not envious but satirical, I'm not jealous
but lustful,
I'm alone and I'm alive and I'm proud.
GLADNESS
for me "alone" connotates too heavily as victim and sadly ends an otherwise strong poem the way a woe -is -me slam poem might end.
Just my take. Alone feels generic and meme-ish. I would prefer you were terrified or hysterical. I know I am.

