05-31-2021, 08:59 PM
(05-31-2021, 06:45 PM)newbie Wrote: Hi Tranquility base and many thanks for your feedback,Nothing wrong with writing "in the moment" and then leaving it alone. Although this site, by its very nature, pushes you to edit, it's also possible to over edit and lose the original energy of the poem.
I can see how this poem is hard to follow,
I never spent much time reflecting on it before posting
It was very much written 'in the moment' lol (I'd had a few scoops!)
I think it does serve as a snapshot of lockdown though and I should try and tighten it up
I've been enjoying reading the poetry on here
Think I was a little too keen to post something!
Newbie
You never explained "dug" instead of "dog". Is that slang or your own way of referencing it?