05-28-2021, 12:05 PM
Really enjoyed this one, Mark. Intertwined is a key word for me because it feels like electricity is a metaphor for sexuality at the same time as sexuality is a metaphor for electricity. The two intertwine to the point where you can hardly distinguish where one ends and the other begins. As though the two have a common ground .
I'm not sure I'd mess with this at all, but part of me wonders if "charged" might be a stronger word than "flowing".
Thanks for the read.
I'm not sure I'd mess with this at all, but part of me wonders if "charged" might be a stronger word than "flowing".
Thanks for the read.
(05-28-2021, 05:46 AM)Mark A Becker Wrote: Common Ground
To the softness of dawn
we awaken, intertwined
wires, flowing with electricity,
eliciting a warm glow
from a naked bulb.