05-12-2021, 09:14 PM
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Hi TqB
bit of a poem of two halves for me.
Liked
Life makes no sense
until you see the rat king,
a circle of dread and ill-omen
our tails intertwined into a clock of death,
thirteen dedicated bits of rage
looking outward into the dark.
the rest, not so much.
L4 - could really use some work, it just doesn't flow that well out of L3.
(a thirteen handed clock with echoes of 1984 is nice)
L6 - a perfect end line.
Best, Knot
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Hi TqB
bit of a poem of two halves for me.
Liked
Life makes no sense
until you see the rat king,
a circle of dread and ill-omen
our tails intertwined into a clock of death,
thirteen dedicated bits of rage
looking outward into the dark.
the rest, not so much.
L4 - could really use some work, it just doesn't flow that well out of L3.
(a thirteen handed clock with echoes of 1984 is nice)
L6 - a perfect end line.
Best, Knot
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