Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base
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Having Cathar in the title does muddy the waters  (when only Philip was used in section 5).
You could try, as an alternative line 6
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He was Philip, a Bard of conspiracies,
or even
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Cathar, who was Philip, a Bard ...

or just not being quite so elliptical Smile

Just out of curiosity, who do you see as the audience for this?

Best, Knot

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RE: Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base - by Knot - 05-07-2021, 12:58 AM
RE: Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base - by Knot - 05-08-2021, 10:02 PM
RE: Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base - by Knot - 05-08-2021, 10:49 PM
RE: Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base - by Knot - 05-09-2021, 01:03 AM
RE: Plain Songs from Tranquillity Base - by Knot - 05-09-2021, 11:38 PM



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