A Mystic Journey

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I feel I am Snow White, ah no 'like', two sentences?
graced by the song of blue birds 
perching on my shoulder
a brown-grey rabbit at my feet 
I welcome each strange creature,
seeing bursts of yellowish light
firecrackers filling me with red pretty trippy adventure here
It dawns on me: this is the color of love
- Love unknown/now known. Is the slash indicating two separate ideas as the same, the colon above makes me think your now telling me what this journey has been about
Am I dead? 

• It doesn't matter. I am at peace now. It is complete. It is finished. This bullet here takes me back to the other bullet like either these are two different sections or the first ones like the overture to the big event.  So this bullet point seems too matter of fact.  It doesn't matter is kind of weak and maybe defeatist 
  

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Anyways thanks for sharing!
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thanks for the comments! I appreciate them. The sexual allusions were deliberate. Perhaps I should use a different word than arenas. This poem is about combining the sexual with the sacred or spirit. Erotic spirituality. But I need to do some editing. Thank you, again!