The Hobbyhorse

[Majestic Sun]

Majestic, Dukealien has done such a thorough job of critique, I will wait until I see a revision, but I wanted to add my second to Duke's first comment, that this is an interesting poem.  I kind of like the meandering aspect, but that is going to annoy other readers.  But every stanza has some good lines as D pointed out.

Anyway, looking forward to the revision.

Thanks Tranquil, I think the revision though may ruin the poem. What do you think?