Crazy hot

[Knot]

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Hi tmanzano.

there are not two people.

No, this was clear, at least in your last revision, even allowing for the 'misdirection' of 'down the hall'.

Just a thought(s)

I catch him staring

every morning, watching

me leave. I smile

...

or

Every morning I catch him

staring, watching me leave

...

or

Every morning he watches

me leave.  Staring.  I smile

...

I tried to tie in the beginning stanza's with the last.

I was trying to tie it to the title

"THIS summer has been crazy hot" I wanted to convey a repetition of this cycle. That it happens more than once and left to the reader to decide how often or for how long it may have been happening.

Yes, got that (though wondered what happened to fall/autumn) - if you were going for cyclic shouldn't the verse order be summer/fall/winter/spring/THIS summer ... ?

your writing style seems to differ from mine

I would hope so! Be very boring if we all wrote the same way

Best, Knot

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