04-22-2021, 06:29 AM
Hey, I was just catching up here. Read your response to Knot. Reading the poem several times, I think you need maybe a mirror somewhere earlier to make this key piece of the puzzle, that there is only one person available to the reader. It could be a very oblique reference, so your ending's impact is retained. If not a mirror, some other way for the reader to detect or suspect it's only one person.
something like:
He's always there when I am
in that hallway
(a very poor and quickly tossed out example)
something like:
He's always there when I am
in that hallway
(a very poor and quickly tossed out example)