04-21-2021, 08:20 AM
I know for a fact I will give little to no credible critique here other than impressions.
I found this very tactile and visual. As stated before, I think, about the last stanzas I too see how this would easily end at, "preserved one hundred times over". I was thoroughly satisfied there and felt it to be a powerful ending. It would leave me with an unknown of moving forward from a loved one lost rather that telling me. I felt at that very moment I could float out into my own thoughts of mourning. Either way a wonderful piece.
Again, I am sorry that I cannot critique between the lines for form or function. Maybe someday.
I found this very tactile and visual. As stated before, I think, about the last stanzas I too see how this would easily end at, "preserved one hundred times over". I was thoroughly satisfied there and felt it to be a powerful ending. It would leave me with an unknown of moving forward from a loved one lost rather that telling me. I felt at that very moment I could float out into my own thoughts of mourning. Either way a wonderful piece.
Again, I am sorry that I cannot critique between the lines for form or function. Maybe someday.