The long furlough (edit 1)

[Mark A Becker]

Hey leaf-

Interesting short one...

Three times daily
for over a year
Mick has plodded
  up
then
  down
the drive.

One afternoon last December
he tried plodding  not sure of this line
  up
the drive
  and all the way to the bus stop

only to find
his feet took him back
  down
the drive
yet again. 

"It's a shame," he said,
I was looking forward to the bus."  ending on "he said" didn't work for me

I think this one is better for the "Poetry for Fun" forum, as it is a fun one.  I very much like that it seems that Mick is really trying to avoid catching the bus.  A slight clue as to why he's avoiding the bus would help- just a very slight clue.  "Three times daily" implies an effort to overcome some type of fear, yet there's not enough to show why he can't overcome "robot-body-syndrome."

Or, it could be that he sort of tries, but always winds up missing the bus, 3x365 times, or over 1,000 times a year (for reasons that are very unclear).  That's a whole lot of missing the bus, making the poem pretty unrealistic, yet humorous...

Thanks for the read,
Mark