Show me the bricks
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Hi Frenchie,

I like your poem. The repetition adds to the frustration very well. Maybe consider shortening the lines to roll off a little easier. But that is just a nitpick.
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Show me the bricks - by Frenchie - 03-14-2021, 01:46 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by Knot - 03-14-2021, 03:33 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by Mark A Becker - 03-15-2021, 09:44 PM
RE: Show me the bricks - by vinitakshv - 03-26-2021, 11:49 PM
RE: Show me the bricks - by savannah - 04-10-2021, 04:21 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by newbie - 06-04-2021, 06:09 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by ZonaIncerta - 06-07-2021, 09:58 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by micah3801 - 06-08-2021, 04:15 AM
RE: Show me the bricks - by SPOKENDAWORD - 09-03-2021, 12:13 AM



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