Ebullition
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Hi vinita,

I agree with tranquility base in that some of the word choices and metaphors seem a little off. Consider some more trimming and not using mixed metaphors so you have uniformity.
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Ebullition - by vinitakshv - 03-26-2021, 04:00 PM
RE: Ebullition - by TranquillityBase - 03-27-2021, 01:57 AM
RE: Ebullition - by savannah - 04-10-2021, 04:20 AM
RE: Ebullition - by Semicircle - 03-24-2022, 02:34 AM



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