03-26-2021, 11:49 PM
Hello Frenchie,
I think your poem highlights your frustration well. I did feel the line "show me options A, B and C" was a little off, and I think at some points the poem veered into a bullet-point, "tell" territory as opposed to showing us your emotions. But I think it aligns with showing frustration in general. The "don't tell me" refrain got a tad repetitive for me, maybe use it once and let the remaining phrases follow?
An easy, light read.
I think your poem highlights your frustration well. I did feel the line "show me options A, B and C" was a little off, and I think at some points the poem veered into a bullet-point, "tell" territory as opposed to showing us your emotions. But I think it aligns with showing frustration in general. The "don't tell me" refrain got a tad repetitive for me, maybe use it once and let the remaining phrases follow?
An easy, light read.