Star to Mantua

[Mark A Becker]

Mark, did you not take note of busker's rhyme scheme?  It's quite novel.  You may want to keep it intact.  It's part of what makes the poem so lovely.

Yes, I picked up on the a-b-c d-d a-b-c rhyme scheme, and I agree that it is quite novel, and un-forced.
My rearrangement makes the rhyming internal, which I merely offer as a suggestion. I don’t know that the variation in meter requires end-rhymes.

That said, it’s busker’s poem, and just my two cents.

Internal, or end-rhyming both work for me: it’s a lovely poem.

All of that said, for me, “leaching” is the only odd choice. But Tim differs...

Mark