03-25-2021, 10:31 PM
Hi Busker,
Much as I like Mark's revision, I want to speak up for the "leaching" line, which is my favorite in the whole poem. My slight revision:
There is always a moon
full, for young lovers,
leaching silver from the fairy tale night
from water beneath bridges,
burnishing the ridges,
while they lie in a swoon
underneath the covers
and larks sing of the soon to be light
Also, beautiful title. I guess I hoped for an explication in the poem of the title.
Much as I like Mark's revision, I want to speak up for the "leaching" line, which is my favorite in the whole poem. My slight revision:
There is always a moon
full, for young lovers,
leaching silver from the fairy tale night
from water beneath bridges,
burnishing the ridges,
while they lie in a swoon
underneath the covers
and larks sing of the soon to be light
Also, beautiful title. I guess I hoped for an explication in the poem of the title.