Sadness - edit

[Knot]

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Hi Duke,
better for the revision.
I do stumble on ‘helplessly’ and, to a lesser degree, ‘pride’.

Wondered about

I looked across my street and saw
my neighbor’s car with one side scraped
no beauty she and he’s no prize,
my neighbor, but to see that scrape
just made me sad. Is it crazy
or bad to sympathize like this
so helplessly or, pride aside,
the opposite?

Then had a go at your two-syllable challenge.

Again I see my neighbor’s car
across the street, the one side scraped.
No beauty she and he’s no prize,
my neighbor, but to see that scratch
just makes me sad. Am I crazy,
or just bad, to feel like this, this
lost, or, pride aside, the reverse?


Best, Knot





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