Sadness - edit

[dukealien]

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Sadness


I looked across my street and saw
my neighbor’s car with one side scraped
it’s not a beauty of a car
and he’s no prize, my neighbor, but
to see that scrape just made me sad.
Am I a crazy man or bad
to sympathize so helplessly
or, pride aside, the opposite?

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Thanks for constructive criticism.  I took me a while to come around to the idea of past tense because (to me) present tense implied it might be a recurring event (see, react).  But that's me; if the recurring idea doesn't come across, one-time will do.  That's why we look for crit!