03-09-2021, 08:39 AM
Hi Alexorande! I really enjoyed reading your poem. I totally agree with the critique that said "it grows on you." Every time I read it, I felt like a new line stood out to me and deepened my interpretation of your writing. That being said, I think my initial interpretation was different than what you might have intended. I thought of the "image kept by dusty glass" as a picture frame. To me, the fly repeatedly tapping it symbolized a person's mind inevitably returning to an old memory every time she finds her mind still (when "the house is empty"). After reading the replies to your original post, I quite enjoyed diving into your poem again, this time seeing the "dusty glass" as the window you presumably intended. I personally like the level of ambiguity your poem has! I think that it is a strength to be able to find multiple meaningful messages in one piece of writing. I also like how it takes a little bit of thinking to get to the poem's "real" meaning. However, if you would rather make your original intention more apparent, I think playing with the title could be a good way to do that. Your current title doesn't add much to the meaning in my mind and I think you could really use the title as an opportunity to anchor your message. Overall, I really enjoyed reading it! 