03-04-2021, 03:14 PM
(03-03-2021, 10:39 PM)rowens Wrote: Birds in this WorldHey Rowens, just wanted to chirp in with a word about L5. At first I wondered why the word "just" was needed. I thought the line was stronger without it. Then I thought it would be stronger still if the line was simply "an afterthought, a bird." Anyway, I still think so, but part of me suspects it was intentional as is.
Birds in this world,
how we let them survive;
there's one pecking;
here's one fluttering:
Just like an afterthought, a bird.
I once knew an angel that had angelwings,
and a fairy that had butterflywings,
but a bird
is like something all its own.
A bird with wings:
The concept is a mutant.
