unmelted - edit

[dukealien]

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unmelted


ice vitrifies my thoughts this jewel day
  oaks diamond-clad
  streets dimly pearled
  onyx bushes flocked with moonstone wool

bright bitter beauty’s gemstone silences
deep-frozen as your unresponsive heart

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Thanks to all critics.  At the risk of trying too hard, I've incorporated just about all the advice in this edit - including removal of punctuation other then hyphens, line breaks, and a bit of white space.  

I had this ready to post when @Mark provided his insight... already had the vague feeling "jet" was too multi.  The result brings the line closer to IP.   "Vitrifies" came hard, and may be a mistake:  "turns to glass" fits dictionary-wise, but could be another lookup trap.