02-23-2021, 12:11 AM
This is marvelous. Would it be better to add punctuation throughout, and not just at the last line (why only the single period?)? I initially thought that it might be better to name a specific type of tree and bush as we are normally told to do, but I'm not sure any specific tree would *sound* as good as the word "tree". Elms diamond-clad? Perhaps. Is "occupy" the best word for what ice is doing to your thoughts? Seem to be consumed or tormented by these thoughts.