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[Tiger the Lion]

iced in and cut off

powerless in winter’s grip

rain like razor wire

Hey Mark, I have a bit of a love/hate relationship with this poem. I love the word choices and the interplay between them. It is the interplay that allows the poem to convey so much in just 13 words. You know how I feel about brevity, so for me this is a very strong short poem. The part that I hate, is that it's a very strong short poem dressed as a haiku. I read what you said about syllable counts on your other thread and I agree they have their place. But to me your poem does things that are not usually asked of a haiku (which for me is the charm of the piece) but it also does not really check all the boxes of what a haiku usually  is built on. I am guilty of the same thing ALL THE TIME which is why your poem fascinates me. I wouldn't offer any specific suggestions but you might try kicking some of the haiku out of this and see what you end up with. 

(at least 40% of me disagrees completely with my comments above) 

Enjoyed,
Paul