The deepest grief

[busker]

Two thoughts, busker:

Why is the poem a continuation of the title? Haven't seen it before in prose or poetry. Otherwise standing alone beginning with Is makes it grammatically nonsensical.

Secondly, one word for 'thin layer' could be smear or film?

Cheers. 

Hi John - much as I’d like to have been the first, writers have been playing around with all parts of a poem including the title, for some time now. Joseph Stroud’s poem ‘And I raised my hand to him in return’ is an example of where the title could be a legitimate continuation of the last line in the poem. It’s not what I’ve done here, it’s far more clever than that.

On the second point -the specific thickness I had in mind was from a few mm to a couple of inches (the link explains it) but thanks for your suggestions.