01-24-2021, 10:12 PM
John,
I would change the title to " pathologist"
"I chop skulls and dip into brains
like you dipping soldiers into egg." inserted some changes
"I understand. I really do." cliche
"I know their very essence" doesn't seem likely
I think a lot of this poem could be cut for improvement.
As this is basic I'll stop.
best
dale
I would change the title to " pathologist"
"I chop skulls and dip into brains
like you dipping soldiers into egg." inserted some changes
"I understand. I really do." cliche
"I know their very essence" doesn't seem likely
I think a lot of this poem could be cut for improvement.
As this is basic I'll stop.
best
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.