Wind At My Back Tonight - edit3

[philip]

edit 2

Hello Duke,

An enjoyable and breezy tale with a poignant resolution.
Just a few suggestions-

First line 'could' - 'would'
'...but barely sail...' but barely set sail ?
'to wrong doing..' - to the wind - make it real.

'foul winds' sounds too melodramatic - close-hauled ?
'nor dare I claim I never...' - I dare not claim I never... ?

The third verse changes rhyme scheme, which is fine and engaging, but the message seems like a departure.
Yes, reflecting on a sailor's life, and a chance for imagery. Forget the thief, what sights and what battles has he seen.

'my raspy final breath' - my final raspy breath

'I’ll set my stuns’ls, white as angel wings' - white as angel wings I’ll set my stuns’ls

And ends with a nice, circular resolution.

just my thoughts...............P