05-14-2010, 08:37 AM
I do love nature poetry 
This just needs a bit of editing, I think. A few lines were a little confusing for me, and maybe it would help if you could use more descriptive imagery. In particular, the beginning of the last stanza, "along the line over to the right"... I don't know what 'line' you were referring to, or to the right of what. Try to be more specific about this scene, just imo.
Thanks for the read LB
This just needs a bit of editing, I think. A few lines were a little confusing for me, and maybe it would help if you could use more descriptive imagery. In particular, the beginning of the last stanza, "along the line over to the right"... I don't know what 'line' you were referring to, or to the right of what. Try to be more specific about this scene, just imo.Thanks for the read LB
PS. If you can, try your hand at giving some of the others a bit of feedback. If you already have, thanks, can you do some more?