11-03-2020, 10:49 PM
julevin1,
Overuse of commas. "Sleepy" should not be capitalized. A bit sophomoric as it is littered with cliches. This leaves the impression that the writer is trying to be profound, yet there is no profundity to be found. This is not necessarily a bad thing, just a stage most of us have to go through. Just keep writing.
best,
dale
Overuse of commas. "Sleepy" should not be capitalized. A bit sophomoric as it is littered with cliches. This leaves the impression that the writer is trying to be profound, yet there is no profundity to be found. This is not necessarily a bad thing, just a stage most of us have to go through. Just keep writing.
best,
dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.