10-30-2020, 05:24 PM
I like the development towards a payoff in the final two lines. It works.
Could do with fewer line breaks perhaps
Could do with fewer line breaks perhaps
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RE: Please, stay away. - by Kingsausage1778 - 10-30-2020, 06:34 PM
RE: Please, stay away. - by Magpie - 10-30-2020, 08:42 PM
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