10-21-2020, 06:27 AM
edit;
White egret shimmers
over mirrored clouds and leaves–
plucks carp from branches.
Thanks to both critics! Good points. Tried to show a bit more this time, particularly overwriting the disliked "poses." "Plucks" may still be a little too animated for a haiku, though.
White egret shimmers
over mirrored clouds and leaves–
plucks carp from branches.
Thanks to both critics! Good points. Tried to show a bit more this time, particularly overwriting the disliked "poses." "Plucks" may still be a little too animated for a haiku, though.
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