10-06-2020, 11:16 PM
Hi, although I'm unsure about the use of abstract imagery in short form poetry such as haiku I do like the image that you have presented here and seeing as though you haven't specified that it is a haiku then it's fine with me. Have you played around with line structure because I feel that moving line 1 to the end would work better, also do you need 'red'?
Just a couple of thoughts, cheers for the read and the beautiful image,
Mark
Just a couple of thoughts, cheers for the read and the beautiful image,
Mark
wae aye man ye radgie
