Song To Be Sung

[Acharien]

This is really cute. I like the clear balance between adult and childishness, it gives the poem a timeless feel to it. I did notice you misspelled "their" as "thier," which I assume is a typo, but I wanted to bring it to your attention because it distracted me a bit and you might want to fix it.
"Let us believe in a word called fate,
and steer clear of fools so consumed in thier hate."

I also appreciate the message you present, it's very positive. I could see this being put into a motivational poetry book or on a poster. Keep it up!