09-17-2020, 12:03 PM
Hey yall
Made a tiny change in the wording of the second stanza. Other than that I think I'm pretty satisfied with this version for the moment. Thank you everyone who's been a part of the process so far.
RiverNotch,
I'm keeping some terms in that are obvious because they're obvious. If it doesn't work for you, then it doesn't work... sorry XD. As for your comments on fire and fate, I didn't really write in those two terms to create a picture, more to set up the picture.
Kindest regards
Alex
Made a tiny change in the wording of the second stanza. Other than that I think I'm pretty satisfied with this version for the moment. Thank you everyone who's been a part of the process so far.
RiverNotch,
I'm keeping some terms in that are obvious because they're obvious. If it doesn't work for you, then it doesn't work... sorry XD. As for your comments on fire and fate, I didn't really write in those two terms to create a picture, more to set up the picture.
Kindest regards
Alex