And Die - Edit, title change

[dukealien]

edit;

And Die


So, invaders claiming
we don’t care enough
which moves your mob
to pillage and destroy– 

We do care, you know.
And though we won’t
post signs about it
this is a nice place
a beautiful, beloved
peaceful place.

Then please accept
this gift, four words:

see suburbia and die.

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Hi duke,
wonder if you might achieve more with less,


We do care, you know.
And though we won’t
post signs about it
this is a nice place
a beautiful, beloved
peaceful place, so,
an offering, four
words for you:

see suburbia and die.


The lecturing/hectoring tone of the opening three verses seems self-defeating.
If it is a reply to BLM etc, shame you couldn't get those four words down to three.

I don't think the title helps, in terms of clarity, though were the final line the title
(in Latin or otherwise), and a final three word line played of both it and BLM then ...

Best, Knot
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Good advice.  Not sure I'd call the tone "hectoring" (which would be more Hector whipping up the Trojans, right?) but lecturing, yes.

The idea of addressing the villains by name in the closing is tempting, but I'll stick to an abbreviated address above to set the stage, for now, anyway.  Those names are so constructed that they have to be untied at length to have their evil and dishonesty understood... which is, inevitably, a lecture.

Also, the Latin was pretentious.  My bad.